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Timing (Free verse) by INTRANSIT The tick-tock-tick of the
walls, pictures, windows,
has me inhaling the stench
of sterility while the high
point in my eyes blackens the
room and definity falls away.
Up the ladder:
the black light
Down the ladder:
C a n n i b a l
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Posted: May 26, 2003 6:57 PM PDT; Last modified: May 26, 2003 6:57 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.230521 Overall Rank: 4222 Comments:
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Blue Magpie @ 62.176.75.102
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26-May-03/10:40 PM
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I liked Definity, though I have never heard it before, but I lost it on the high point in my eyes, probab;ly a result of the low point in my mind, it has a nice feel though.
yes nice feel and structure
Perhaps not ambitious enough though
You want to see timing.Check out the inside of my brain.
http://www.paradiselost.com/index.php?mo
Well, you're definitely a right hand drive, that's for sure. That is no advertisement. That was well engineered art. period.
Ask that troop how are they gonna top themselves? Thanks for the sock in the gut blasting me backwards into a reality check!!!! I still got an appointment though. gotta start someplace.
loved it 10
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