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Free verse № 50040

the black light

Member since 2003 · Posted 23 May 2003 · 7 comments

it was that one dark night that one black night the night i speak of is the night i saw the black light for this deep dark night this forever blackened night is the night i went to hell and back to find the black light i traveled down the road though the forrest with eyes the road without a fork just a narrow, winding road as i traveled, the night grew darker until all i saw in the forrest with eyes the forrest with deep blue eyes was this black light i speak of it was all that guided me for it was all that was leading me though the forrest of hell as the road grew narrower my time i felt growing shorter i continued on, seemed without purpose but i was called for this journey i say called to find this wicked i say this wicked black light i speak of called to make it come forth out of the shadowed forrest to where this black light iam speaking of would shine bright bright as the sunlight on a crystal clear day bright as the heavens for this eternal black light would shine bright as day inward into my soul for my soul would see the light of day

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[4] Shardik 23-May-03/7:48 PM Reply
I would suggest not smoking pot out of cans for a while mate.
[n/a] crwncka1 › Shardik 24-May-03/12:55 PM Reply
shardik, i smoke outta b0ngs... get it rite
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › crwncka1 24-May-03/1:38 PM Reply
Newsflash: stfu.
[n/a] crwncka1 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 24-May-03/9:40 PM Reply
agreed...
[5] Blue Magpie 23-May-03/10:11 PM Reply
Forest is spelt with olny one r = forest
[n/a] crwncka1 › Blue Magpie 24-May-03/12:50 PM Reply
iam sorry! my speelchecker sux :D, but hey, thanks for the feedback
[6] cyan9 18-Jan-06/9:32 AM Reply
Interesting as a story, but the repetition of words to be creepy comes off making it sound like it should be read to scare children on halloween.