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the black light (Free verse) by crwncka1

it was that one dark night that one black night the night i speak of is the night i saw the black light for this deep dark night this forever blackened night is the night i went to hell and back to find the black light i traveled down the road though the forrest with eyes the road without a fork just a narrow, winding road as i traveled, the night grew darker until all i saw in the forrest with eyes the forrest with deep blue eyes was this black light i speak of it was all that guided me for it was all that was leading me though the forrest of hell as the road grew narrower my time i felt growing shorter i continued on, seemed without purpose but i was called for this journey i say called to find this wicked i say this wicked black light i speak of called to make it come forth out of the shadowed forrest to where this black light iam speaking of would shine bright bright as the sunlight on a crystal clear day bright as the heavens for this eternal black light would shine bright as day inward into my soul for my soul would see the light of day

cyan9 18-Jan-06/9:32 AM
Interesting as a story, but the repetition of words to be creepy comes off making it sound like it should be read to scare children on halloween.




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