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almost (Free verse) by wordho How does your chance happen so fast?
Why is the window only open for a moment,
Yet you wait a lifetime for the breeze?
You are thrown off guard, disoriented,
Deflated without warning.
The almost hurts so much.
He wants more than you are and left
Before he ever knew you.
Somehow he managed
To be branded on your soul.
He is the template
You always imagined love would be.
The almost has left a lump in your throat
And tears in your eyes;
So hollow, so empty.
As much a part of you as your love for him.
He had what he was looking for and loved you,
Almost.
Up the ladder:
19
Down the ladder:
I hope not
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Posted: April 23, 2003 5:35 PM PDT; Last modified: April 23, 2003 5:35 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.313765 Overall Rank: 3530 Comments:
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e1ementfire @ 208.20.194.177
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24-Apr-03/1:35 AM
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lines two and three are beautiful, but of course sad as well
Interesting choice of subject but dealt with heavy handedly.Define what you are saying with more originality you must compete with the subject and make it a little more engaging. Liked the lines 1-6, (6
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