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To My Grave (Free verse) by Bonehiss
I knew you kept them! I found them yesterday In our secret hiding place. The policeman, The waitress, Even the little girl from the bus, They just sit there now. Nothing to do but be dead. I sat with them last night for hours Remembering all the fun we had, And that wild crazy look in your eyes? I owe you a lot my friend. You taught me to enjoy The simple act of murder, As it should be enjoyed, As one caught up In passionate sport, Holding nothing back, Letting it grab hold of you And pull you inside. Unsanctified. Unholy once again. In your secret garden Of earthly horrors, Lay sorrows, The last remnants Of failed mythologies, That torment me. That tease me. That feed my one desire. And speed me to my grave.

Up the ladder: a light in your eyes
Down the ladder: Mary Jane

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5853
Posted: March 14, 2003 7:25 PM PST; Last modified: August 22, 2003 8:27 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.178.178.147 | 14-Mar-03/9:16 PM | Reply
you write these poems strictly for yourself. This is completely inaccessable. Think about the audience. Tell them the story.
[n/a] Lord Ganus @ 68.14.26.239 > god'swife | 10-Apr-03/11:01 PM | Reply
gw, you know I Settle Tanhand etc. and you are the ONLY PEOPLE HERE WHO KEEP THAT IN MIND. THE REST ARE PRETENTIOUS GARBAGE. SOME CALL ME PRETENTIOUS. I SAY TO THEM "PRETENTIOUS??? MOI???". I say ****, you say no, I say ****, you say no No NO, ohhh, oh no.
[8] Derge @ 12.233.252.72 > god'swife | 11-Apr-03/1:58 PM | Reply
What are you talking about. Fuck the audience. You right the poem for yourself. If anyone else likes them who fucking cares.

Grin

Derge
[6] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 15-Mar-03/2:51 AM | Reply
The end of S2 And all of S3 is ethereal but the 'stuff' is frustrating what is the stuff? is it relevant? i felt denied not knowing. Otherwise with a bit of chinking this could shine like an ice sculpture. 7
[6] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 11-Apr-03/2:23 AM | Reply
Very concealed points, please enlighten me more I almost enjoyed it 6
[8] Mr Pig @ 62.105.88.10 | 11-Apr-03/8:31 AM | Reply
Quite poignant, I liked the last Stza.

(Does not deserve a 4)
[8] Mr Pig (again) @ 195.92.194.16 | 14-Apr-03/12:54 AM | Reply
Are you Caducus? you write quite similar. Liked this my boy good show.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.163.145 | 23-Aug-03/2:20 AM | Reply
horus, you bastage, i know its you.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > SupremeDreamer | 23-Aug-03/5:36 PM | Reply
I wouldn't kick him out of bed if he was, anyway, but it's not.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.160.47 > horus8 | 23-Aug-03/5:43 PM | Reply
lol. well, i was fooled for a moment then. -shrug- hows the killin?
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