replying on I Love You Mildred Rogers No Matter What by cat
3 Aug 2004, 9:09 AM
may I take a shot?
on Cassandra. by SupremeDreamer
3 Aug 2004, 8:59 AM
I'd like to see the rythm a bit smoother. I like this.
on Mr. Stryker, Do You Really Want Some Kind of War? by cat
3 Aug 2004, 8:48 AM
You intrigue me, feline. Some help.
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You can afford to trim this, I think
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You can afford to trim this, I think
on Mushroom Potion #9 by <{Baba^Yaga}>
2 Aug 2004, 5:58 AM
Did you want this to be just a bit pimply?
Scary,fun.
Scary,fun.
on Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina
1 Aug 2004, 6:38 AM
Are you yelling at yourself in your head? This is what confuses/bugs me about this. 8 for now.
replying on You Can't Kill A Dead Man! by dougsoderstrom
1 Aug 2004, 6:31 AM
Wow! Being called out by a fellow poet to fight? How fellow can he be?
on Barflies and Bombshells by wilco
1 Aug 2004, 6:27 AM
Even with the title, this works both ways. Ugh! I'm feeling girlish this morning.
on The Conception of a Dream by wilco
1 Aug 2004, 6:24 AM
I rather like it. I like the cadence but the 4th line os s-2 seems just a bit wordy. Excellent stanza though.
on Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos
31 Jul 2004, 8:45 AM
Obviously, your best.
on Untitled. by SupremeDreamer
28 Jul 2004, 9:12 AM
"I could not connect- and be absorbed in a stardust high" excellent line. the rest leaves me...unkempt.
on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus
28 Jul 2004, 9:08 AM
Yes, I like the reform as well.
on The Annual January Thaw by Dovina
27 Jul 2004, 5:45 PM
Interesting shuffle.
replying on Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT
27 Jul 2004, 5:41 PM
thank you though.
replying on Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT
27 Jul 2004, 5:39 PM
Well Dovy, how long does it take human tissue, or a culture, to decompose? (ret)
replying on Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT
27 Jul 2004, 5:34 PM
My original idea involved Africa. I thought it too cliche. Damn Olympics. heh.
replying on Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT
27 Jul 2004, 9:44 AM
Thank you sir. How did you get to Laos from here?
on Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222
27 Jul 2004, 8:42 AM
no big pompous words. cliches, used artfully almost unnoticeable. backwards works.
replying on Bad animal limericks by INTRANSIT
25 Jul 2004, 6:53 PM
Hmmmm. My dictionary spells it with two. (American Heritage collegiate dictionary)-Houghton Mifflin '02.
wanna fight about it?
wanna fight about it?
on peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day by w~* ATHENA *~w
25 Jul 2004, 6:22 AM
If this means what I think it does, sad, very sad. Good poem though