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The Annual January Thaw (Free verse) by Dovina Arousing hope,
tempting young hikers
to let down their guard
so he can kill them,
natural selection
sends the unwary out in tennis shoes
to lose their senses in watery snow.
Thus he
reduces the optimist population,
promoting survival
of embittered stoics
who believe he is against them.
Up the ladder:
Guilt Trip
Down the ladder:
On Visiting My Father
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Posted: July 27, 2004 12:57 PM PDT; Last modified: July 27, 2004 12:57 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.2 Overall Rank: 991 Comments:
Interesting shuffle.
Great last two lines! The reversal of whom is against what took me a re-read to get. Well worth it to someone who thinks a hike is walking to the corner 7-11 instead of taking the car.
Yeah...you've captured city life...nice work
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I remember hiking, not in January (May I think), when there was no snow at the bottom of the mountain so I wore hi-tops on a whim - mistake since I was soon tramping through snow...
crappy snow. Good poem.