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On Visiting My Father (Lyric) by sliver
If I wasn't at your funeral
There's no way I could know
That you're locked inside a casket
Somewhere down below.
It looks so dead and vacant
In this corner of your newfound home,
But I'm not too sure it'll help
when they finally place your stone.
The grass is brown and withered
As are the leaves beneath my knees
While I watch the prayers I whisper
As my breath begins to freeze.
The sun casts winter shadows
which slowly envelope me,
As I pray for the soul of a dead man
In the shade of a lifeless tree.
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 6.198907
Overall Rank: 992
Posted: November 4, 2003 11:15 PM PST; Last modified: November 10, 2003 6:59 AM PST
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I refer you to the hugely poignant poem "Fathers" by amielou82:
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
Full marks for keeping to this socially important theme!
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