Re: a comment on Haunted by Bachus	30-Aug-04/3:10 PM
No. It is a small and distant message like a fortune strip on fire quietly warning step aside there's a motion in motion stack smoke filling sky like blood from a pencil struck heart smacking through keyboard gears do not wait motion waits not for waiting it will get here when it gets here and follow here. Just be wearing something flammable.
Re: a comment on What Has It Gotten Us? by Dovina	29-Aug-04/12:42 PM
I'm all for women's lib. If they can do for themselves, that's less I gotta do. I'm mildly chauvy today. Chauvy chase?
Re: a comment on Haunted by Bachus	29-Aug-04/5:34 AM
I stuck with the water theme too long on that last one, didn't i.
Re: Haunted by Bachus	29-Aug-04/5:17 AM
Do you think/feel it is somehow your duty to guide those who follow your work? Picked up O.B. o A. P. Spot on, as usual.
Re: What Has It Gotten Us? by Dovina	29-Aug-04/5:14 AM
look up: more than i bargained for.
Re: a comment on Surfer by INTRANSIT	28-Aug-04/10:22 AM
Thanks guys. Had to edit. The opening line didn't jive with the closer. Had to make him more active.
Re: Pomegranate Girl by Caducus	17-Aug-04/12:10 PM
I think you would do better to lose any rhyme here, even accidental. Good to see ya.
Re: Navy Pier by Doug	17-Aug-04/12:08 PM
concerned. intersting. not sure i like it but it's better than the first time 'round
Re: Pomegranate Girl by Caducus	17-Aug-04/12:06 PM
I wish I had more time.
Re: The Fog And The Androids by Shardik	17-Aug-04/12:04 PM
Narrow space between the fog and the ground. Just right for crawling.
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	7-Aug-04/7:12 AM
"and god goes not at all with wine" ace.
Re: Mike Pike!! by DR Limerick	7-Aug-04/6:35 AM
and that's when Tina screamed "IKE!"
Re: a comment on Solid Understanding by Dovina	6-Aug-04/12:39 PM
inimate? intimate? inmate? uh-oh.
Re: a comment on Solid Understanding by Dovina	6-Aug-04/12:38 PM
might I ask how you became so well versed in, erm, verse?
Re: Honey by Jeremi B. Handrinos	6-Aug-04/8:41 AM
I don't like *trippy* and the first two lines of the last stanza go pimply try to change the why/fly. The rest, unlike me, is ace.
Re: Marina by INTRANSIT	6-Aug-04/8:36 AM
Here. Let me douse this "poem" with the only score that actually befits such a pompous fog.1
Re: The huntsman's secret by Stephen Robins	5-Aug-04/11:17 AM
Too bad neither one of us is bad enough to grace the worst list ,eh?
Re: a comment on Marina by INTRANSIT	5-Aug-04/10:17 AM
You might be right on the caesura. Close call. It feels a bit enjambment heavy maybe. Getting sober?
Re: a comment on Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina	5-Aug-04/6:36 AM
again, I should trust my instincts. upgraded.
Re: a comment on Marina by INTRANSIT	5-Aug-04/6:35 AM
wouldn't the masts be brushing the sheets, then? I see what you mean. are commas allowed in Haiku? Maybe the tall masts are brushing their teeth. dunno.