Poemranker [Poem: The Conception of a Dream] [by wilco] Tue Apr 23 16:56:57 PDT 2024

The conception of this idea came, Not as easily as I might have hoped. With a pause and a wistful sigh, There are thousands of conclusions. Startlingly similar are the plains From one coast to the other. Like film projected to the walls, They stay the same until the next frame comes. To quiet these thoughts Is the goal of the wasted and youthful; And to keep them in the forefront Is the curse of the aged and foolish. There are no planned actions And no meetings for formulation. For second glances and lost ideas Are at best, the seeds of creation.

[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 31-Jul-04/7:52 PM | Reply

I've read this three times and it's still perplexing. First, I see so much variety that "Startlingly similar are the plains From one coast to the other" throws me. And why would the the goal of the wasted and youthful be to quiet these thoughts? Then comes a line I relate to and like: "to keep them in the forefront is the curse of the aged and foolish." The last verse I try to relate to the title and end up only vaguely able. Maybe it's supposed to be vague and dreamy.

[n/a] wilco @ 66.162.22.123 > Dovina | 31-Jul-04/7:53 PM | Reply

The vague and dreamy outcome of the mixture of Nyquil and Bourbon.

[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > wilco | 31-Jul-04/7:54 PM | Reply

makes sense. Chat is not working for me. How about you?

[n/a] wilco @ 66.162.22.123 > Dovina | 31-Jul-04/7:55 PM | Reply

nada.

[n/a] wilco @ 66.162.22.123 > Dovina | 31-Jul-04/7:56 PM | Reply

Incidentally, did you notice the capitalized first letter of each line? Stupid Microsoft Word. Makes it look like I was trying to do some kind of fucked up Acrostic. lol.

[8] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > wilco | 31-Jul-04/7:58 PM | Reply

Yeah, I use word too, and have to go back and de-capitalize.

[n/a] wilco @ 66.162.22.123 > Dovina | 31-Jul-04/7:59 PM | Reply

Oh well. Let he who is without error cast the first insult in my direction. Who will it be?

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 > wilco | 1-Aug-04/2:09 AM | Reply

It will be -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.

Why are you unbelievable nincompo'ops using Word to write plain text? Would you drive an aeroplane down the street to buy a News-paper? Yes, you would. And then you would log onto an Internet driving forum and complain that your car's wings kept "bumping into trees".

[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > wilco | 31-Jul-04/8:03 PM | Reply

I use [Shift]+[Enter] at the end of the lines - cuz I hate that, sometimes that "acrosticness" seems insanely noticable.

For what its worth, I didn't notice that on yours - until you said something. Now. Yep.

This has a nice cadence, btw. I think for me to make sense of it would require a little more analysis on my part - and then I might not agree with it, so - have an 8 for the benefit of the doubt.

[9] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.70 | 1-Aug-04/6:24 AM | Reply

I rather like it. I like the cadence but the 4th line os s-2 seems just a bit wordy. Excellent stanza though.