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youre there... (Free verse) by PhSbLoNdE569
youre always stuck there, in the farthest corner of my mind
in that shadowy place, where only i go, where no one else can find
i go there in my darkest moments, when i need 2 be alone
its alwayz closed to people i dont want knowing, its like my keep keep
away zone
no one knows i love you, they have no idea i care
they dont even know that i know about you, having the same feelings
there
you said it first, then i sort of caught on, then i knew it could be
real
except for the fact that she loved you first, so now im tryin to keep up
my shield
although i told you, and you know the boundaries, seen as she is my
really close friend
ill love you today, even though you may not, ill have feelings until the
very end
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.6666665
Weighted score: 6.3333335
Overall Rank: 847
Posted: March 3, 2004 6:28 PM PST; Last modified: March 3, 2004 6:28 PM PST
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"when i need 2 be alone" to
the content is there, but maybe try and fix some grammatical errors, because this is just like reading an AIM conversation, without the reader's response.
-8- because the poem, though unoriginal (horus8 will tell you that i have no right to say that), is still well put together and communicated