The Plea of the Beneathednessified (New poetry scheme!)

Member since 2004 · Posted 8 Mar 2004 · Edited 14 May 2004 · 8 comments

May be we so close to home Be we may so hopeless alone Impounded in a cageless reality Find for me shelter for jail willing be we Tread over Handed down The filth victorious Be we ignored We the beneathednessified Speak now as a man no dog or angel Be we evoked We the reimpassionated Hoped over Handed faith The middlers humbled May be we so close to home Be we may no longer alone Impressed upon a cageless reality Find for me love for wonder willing be we

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[10] Stephen Robins 14-May-04/9:58 AM Reply

"Speak now as a man no dog or angel" may benefit from punctuation.

Aside from that this poem is a blender full of turds.

[n/a] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w › Stephen Robins 14-May-04/10:09 AM Reply

Perhaps the entire poem would benefit from punctuation.

As, indeed, would your poems and comments. You big homo.

[n/a] Enkidu › wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 14-May-04/11:45 AM Reply

Oh, Ms. Allonby, all riled up and no place to go.
Big words from such a tiny mind.
If I had your motivation I'd take up a permanent residence at the Neverland Ranch
It's just poetry, you ignorant slut.

[10] Stephen Robins › Enkidu 15-May-04/12:45 AM Reply

You have a tiny penis.

[n/a] Shardik › Stephen Robins 15-May-04/2:40 PM Reply

LOL

[5] Sasha 14-May-04/11:53 AM Reply

beneathednessified makes me think of a cross between George Bush on a saturday night after seven beers, and e.e. cummings on a very bad day

[2] New Life Drug 15-May-04/12:18 AM Reply

i cant read this i just cant

[7] darylchew 28-May-07/7:15 AM Reply

some E. E. Cummings in this one ha