Re: O say, can you see? by Dovina	4-Jul-06/6:39 AM
Nice thought and pretty well conveyed too. I esp like the last bit... So pop that cracker, suspend the fight, enjoy the margin, and sparkle the night.
Re: August 23, 1944 - 102 miles west of Paris by Ranger	4-Jul-06/6:46 AM
Great writing...although I can't add much by way of war-facts and distances.
Re: Hugo by little_angel_maria	4-Jul-06/6:55 AM
Hello Maria, As you can see, i am not the only one with the opinion I am about to share withyou. Ranger has the same views. Personally I ain't too impressed with your presentation and feel that you have to be original with this age-old topic Love. You've mentioned the word love toomany times and this also takes away the essence of the theme. I would rather you shorten your lines and fit it into beautifully presented verses (rhyming or free verses) with the same idea and theme you have in mind. Sorry to disappoint but I think I have to be frank in my opinion.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Jul-06/12:24 AM
I like this a lot, Paul. Yes, the last three lines are terrific. Somehow you sound as though you've just read Proverbs.
Re: Astronomy and Pharmaceuticals by wilco	5-Jul-06/7:34 PM
Hey, wilco.... cool. When I read the title in the 'recent list', I was wondering what you'd sing about in astronomy and pharm... Sounds nostalgic to me, but good.
Re: Astronomy and Pharmaceuticals by wilco	5-Jul-06/7:36 PM
P.S. Any new recordings recently?
Re: What? (Wot?) by ecargo	5-Jul-06/7:38 PM
Is this some kind of a Genesis sequel? .... day, light, word, air, birds, breath, ......???
Re: good to see you by hendrimike	5-Jul-06/7:57 PM
Don't tell that no one's actually voted and commented here. So much for decency! I bet if you had to put one sick word into it you'd have probably got a dozen votes. To nit-pick, I'd like it if there were caps for the 'i'. I personally dislike seeing it in small letters, or maybe I'm too particular about that. It would also be nice if the beginning of verses were also caps. It gives a very disordered look without it, making your piece look less impressive. I'm trying to put a tune to it. Think one could fit in , so ... I could probably say that it's fairly good. The lyrics though, are a little common.
Re: wait and see by hendrimike	5-Jul-06/7:59 PM
Not bad.
Re: A Boy Without Rain by D. $ Fontera	5-Jul-06/8:18 PM
A nice theme, there, and I like the last four lines.... Pls punctuate. It's like I have to re read to get the right tone and flow of words.
Re: Orca by Dovina	6-Jul-06/8:02 PM
You've captured it all.... Bravo. I don't think there's much to wonder about after this.
Re: Through a childs eyes by little_angel_maria	8-Jul-06/10:18 AM
As I started reading the beginning of this poem I was immediately reminded of Phil Colin's song 'Another Day In Paradise'. I'm tempted to believe you took your story from there. Excuse me if I'm wrong. And I can't understand how conveniently this poor girl could suddenly find place during the day but at night she had none. Ref is to the line, 'this girl of the night cannot be seen so she finds somewhere to hide,' I am not overly impressed with your presentation. You have good potential at writing, and you need to polish your talent. Like Dovina has stated, shorten your lines and get the beat flowing. You'll be amazed by what you can do.
Re: The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	12-Jul-06/4:00 AM
He definitely deserves to be called a loser.
Re: For My Muse by woodstock20000	12-Jul-06/4:04 AM
I don't quite get it... It's like very vague.
Re: The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	13-Jul-06/4:47 AM
It is so pathetic to see that you managed to get only three votes over a period of three days.... Are we the only ones who log onto PR? I wish there was something we could do about it.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Jul-06/5:30 AM
It is quite interesting to see how your thoughts on the topic led you. I'm also impressed by the way Alchemy has brought about another presentation on this. Actually, apart from the 33 pieces (which is obviously a mistake), I like your poem. I esp like the phrases....shrilling in a noosed bag, whispering forgiveness, Hells pendulum creaked like Pilate’s chair, and also the last three lines.
Re: I hate making titles by drnick	14-Jul-06/5:47 AM
A nice scene, the trees.. the shadows... It's cool how you emphasize on a few things and make a poem out of it. It would be better with a title though.
Re: Inside You by creepshow	14-Jul-06/5:51 AM
A cry of desparation! You've brought it out well.
Re: Tribute by creepshow	14-Jul-06/5:55 AM
Sorry.... not my cup of tea.
Re: To Athena by cleverdevice	14-Jul-06/6:23 PM
Wonderfully worded.