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To Athena (Free verse) by cleverdevice
Innumerable portraits fail to reveal The tranquility of a Greek goddess Whose rich brown eyes tenderly caress The deep held passions I can no longer conceal. As a smooth, spanned hand gently nurses mine Her softly spoken whisper engulfs my breath And slowly, slowly her lips liquid wealth Reaches out to embrace my mouth in kind.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8875
Posted: July 14, 2006 1:44 PM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2006 8:37 AM PDT
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[8] Ranger @ 86.137.108.79 | 14-Jul-06/3:09 PM | Reply
DUDE! The triumphant return! How the devil are you? Last I heard you'd arrived home from someplace in India and were residing in the cold, damp North - whatever possessed you to lurch off there? And, more importantly, are you back in the vicinity of the Shire now?

Typo last line: - embrace.

Good to see you back
[n/a] cleverdevice @ 86.140.151.122 > Ranger | 16-Jul-06/8:33 AM | Reply
I am indeed back in the Shire, soaking up the rays. Its good to be back you know.

[8] Ranger @ 86.131.48.111 > cleverdevice | 16-Jul-06/11:56 PM | Reply
Awesome, I'm envious of anyone soaking up the summer sun - as opposed to soaking up the UV rays of Tesco lighting. You should get in touch with some of the others though, we're footballing most weeks and your presence (not to mention that fine 'keeping) would be a marvellous addition. Are you on MySpace.com? That's as good a way as any of keeping up to date. Plus, it's going to take over the world in the future and I recommend being on the winning side...
[n/a] cleverdevice @ 86.140.151.122 > Ranger | 17-Jul-06/2:19 AM | Reply
I hate to put you wrong, but clearly Facebook.com is the only place to be. I'll see what I can do for football, but being skint the train fair is a little tricky.
[8] Ranger @ 86.140.69.253 > cleverdevice | 17-Jul-06/2:02 PM | Reply
I've gone 2 years without knowing my uni email, so Facebook is out of the question. I might cave in to the pressure and get with it next year, but no promises.
We'll fix up a proper game soon, hitch a lift with one of the lads from nearer you.
[8] amanda_dcosta @ 202.164.140.187 | 14-Jul-06/6:23 PM | Reply
Wonderfully worded.
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