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To Athena (Free verse) by cleverdevice

Innumerable portraits fail to reveal The tranquility of a Greek goddess Whose rich brown eyes tenderly caress The deep held passions I can no longer conceal. As a smooth, spanned hand gently nurses mine Her softly spoken whisper engulfs my breath And slowly, slowly her lips liquid wealth Reaches out to embrace my mouth in kind.

Ranger 14-Jul-06/3:09 PM
DUDE! The triumphant return! How the devil are you? Last I heard you'd arrived home from someplace in India and were residing in the cold, damp North - whatever possessed you to lurch off there? And, more importantly, are you back in the vicinity of the Shire now?

Typo last line: - embrace.

Good to see you back




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