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Lost (Free verse) by Spitfire07 Feeling lost and alone
Pondering wearily on my own
Without you I am lost
As you can see so clearly
I can't stand up
I can't sit down
I'm such a mess without you around
I know that my lines
Can't stand the times
That we live in
I try to excel
And end up in Hell
Nothing makes sense anymore
Who can calm the raging sea
Who can bring back
Me
Up the ladder:
The Fall of Marvin Hyde
Down the ladder:
drunken jill
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Posted: June 4, 2005 6:11 PM PDT; Last modified: June 4, 2005 6:11 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9525743 Overall Rank: 8799 Comments:
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lil_evil_boi @ 70.68.76.244
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4-Jun-05/7:00 PM
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I like the rhyming in the poem. It really enhanced the fact that you're trying to tell the readers how this person is lost. Keep up the good work^^!!
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