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Lost (Free verse) by Spitfire07

Feeling lost and alone Pondering wearily on my own Without you I am lost As you can see so clearly I can't stand up I can't sit down I'm such a mess without you around I know that my lines Can't stand the times That we live in I try to excel And end up in Hell Nothing makes sense anymore Who can calm the raging sea Who can bring back Me

lil_evil_boi 4-Jun-05/7:00 PM
I like the rhyming in the poem. It really enhanced the fact that you're trying to tell the readers how this person is lost. Keep up the good work^^!!




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