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good to see you (Lyric) by hendrimike
and i can still look at you baby even though ive been hurtin' too and maybe you could free whats locked inside of me the time has come for you to choose im still laying side by side with you and in that dream thats what I do and ill wait till i wake to remember i was lost, just a permanent pretender and i remember you to well and i saw that game you played just admit you had the key baby the prize was never far away im still laying side by side with you and in that dream thats what we do and ill wait until i wake to remember i was still just a permanent pretender a permenant pretender a lifetime to surrender she overpowered when i cowered i had lost all of my power

Up the ladder: Be Free Ye
Down the ladder: Go

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9247
Posted: June 16, 2006 2:53 AM PDT; Last modified: July 6, 2006 12:57 AM PDT
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[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 202.164.140.184 | 5-Jul-06/7:57 PM | Reply
Don't tell that no one's actually voted and commented here. So much for decency! I bet if you had to put one sick word into it you'd have probably got a dozen votes.

To nit-pick, I'd like it if there were caps for the 'i'. I personally dislike seeing it in small letters, or maybe I'm too particular about that. It would also be nice if the beginning of verses were also caps. It gives a very disordered look without it, making your piece look less impressive.

I'm trying to put a tune to it. Think one could fit in , so ... I could probably say that it's fairly good. The lyrics though, are a little common.
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