Re: up upon by the indign	14-Jul-06/6:28 PM
Cool.
Re: Memories of modernism by madamefrufru	15-Jul-06/3:44 AM
This reads more like a summary-in-a-nut-shell piece. Or in fact it doesn't read much like a poem. You've got what you want to present, but in my opinion, your presentation needs fixing.
Re: PHOTO by madamefrufru	15-Jul-06/3:48 AM
This I must admit is much better than your previous post. This has character and some good phrases. It is a good read.
Re: forever it was you by the indign	15-Jul-06/6:54 PM
Sounds very sweet and so in love. But I can't understand , if you were so in love how come you never did anything to prove it to her. and you've resigned yourself to that fate.... Think about it...it'slike you've never really done anything about it but watch her all the time.... maybe she needed more from you.
Re: ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY by Gopakumar	15-Jul-06/7:01 PM
First of all... welcome to poemranker Gopakumar. Hope you enjoy this site and all the critiques that you'll come across. To begin with this piece.... I don't fancy this sort of repetitive style much. However, I'll set that aside and say, that you've got an idea of what you want to write and it's presentation is fairly good.
Re: I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta	16-Jul-06/8:22 AM
To those who have read and critiqued this poem...... sorry, but I accidently deleted this poem while trying to edit it.
Re: Intro by MacFrantic	17-Jul-06/4:17 AM
Cool.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Jul-06/4:28 AM
CRL... I can see that you do write well. Unfortunately for me, I quite dislike the themes that are of darkness, death, lifelessness.... as opposed to love and life. Apart from that, it's seems like any other ordinary write that's commonly found around here. One thing that I've learnt on PR these past 7 months is that it's okay to begin this way as long as one keeps in mind that good critiquing actually comes along. It has worked for me. So please take this in good spirit when I say that you have to improve on your presentation style, not wanting to stick mainly to the rhyming scheme. I know you have it in you and I look forward to more of your poems. Till your next... cheers!
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Jul-06/11:13 AM
CRL... This is better than your previous post. It seems more inspirational and better worded.
Re: Get Over It by drnick	18-Jul-06/5:44 AM
The rhyming is good... and also the last lines. This time I see that you have a title for your poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Jul-06/8:37 AM
Very touching and effective. You got me.
Re: Mind Over Madness by drnick	20-Jul-06/8:02 AM
I see that you sum it up in your last lines. What I can't understand is why you guys take drugs. That aside,it gives me something new to think about.
Re: Contractual Paradox of the Old by Dovina	20-Jul-06/8:17 AM
Beautiful... it's like you tell a story, oh well, what am I talking... you are telling a story ... of expectations and of hoping. Give it time... and the story will unfold further... though it's hard work.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Jul-06/3:59 AM
Somehow I feel this is the part II version of your previous poem... Parkinsons. Correct me if I'm wrong. Nice words here.
Re: Suicide Dream by Ranger	24-Jul-06/11:16 PM
Nice... very nice. And great imagery. How do you do it? A very subtle .. softspoken tone..... it's too good.
Re: A Time to Dance by Dovina	25-Jul-06/7:14 AM
Your preaentation of the poem is cool. I like the comparisons and the theme, and also the third verse.
Re: Hot by Dovina	1-Aug-06/9:17 AM
A cool poem for a 'Hot' theme.
Re: Forest by the Sea by Dovina	6-Aug-06/9:40 AM
I like the accidental rhymes. It keeps the tempo going. and the idea of the poem is good too.
Re: How To Ride a Bicycle by Dovina	7-Aug-06/8:58 AM
D. I find this cool and amusing, esp.the last four lines. It amazes me of how you think of simple things and express them in poetry.
Re: Chickens by rnuk	9-Aug-06/9:00 AM
Cool poem and idea. Looking out for more.