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Get Over It (Free verse) by drnick no finer
eye liner
make-up, jeans
designer
I could
try to
find a
minor
to dig
for my
emotions
but they're
already on table
emo = unstable
look at
my hair
how I try not
to care
yet another corporate fad
grow up and hug your dad
Up the ladder:
Unless Redux
Down the ladder:
muted muffability
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Posted: July 17, 2006 12:39 AM PDT; Last modified: July 17, 2006 12:39 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5773 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Ranger @ 86.140.69.253
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17-Jul-06/2:22 PM
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One of the best I've read for months. Catchy, great rhyming, and an excellent punch at the end. Favourited.
I like the rhyme, the brevity, and her eye-liner. What I don't get is whether the sloppy hair is yours or hers. Doesn't matter, I suppose, a fad is a silly fad.
Interesting that you assume I'm speaking of a girl. While it may seem that way, with the way "emo" kids look, I think it could be interpreted either way. I was assuming the role of the emo person who has the hair you speak of. Perhaps if I disconnected the last two lines it would be more apparent?
The rhyming is good... and also the last lines. This time I see that you have a title for your poem.
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