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Memories of modernism

Member since 2006 · Posted 26 Jun 2006 · 3 comments

Perhaps not my first, perhaps not even my 50th but a young memory when I was but a tadpole I went to an art gallery that skimmed the side of the river. Grandeous with a Mr whippy ice cream van parked close enough to get sticky fingers we climbed the stair to the entrance I don’t recall. It’s a possibility that I was still finishing off my flake or not concentrating entirely but I was struck by modern art. A canvass of deoxygenated blood red with a smear of black. This car crash on the wall, I did not or could not read its name.

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[8] Dovina 27-Jun-06/5:54 PM Reply
Leaving me wondering whether it's a painting or a crash is this poem's greatest value. It leans toward a painting, but leaves just enough holes in that view to make me ask whether you are understating something more. I'd like to see it lean the other way.
[7] ecargo 2-Jul-06/12:11 PM Reply
Nice mix of remembered detail and the uncertainty wrought by time/distance. I don't think "grandeous" is a word. Maybe you were just sticky. ;)
[6] amanda_dcosta 15-Jul-06/3:44 AM Reply
This reads more like a summary-in-a-nut-shell piece. Or in fact it doesn't read much like a poem. You've got what you want to present, but in my opinion, your presentation needs fixing.