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Memories of modernism (Free verse) by madamefrufru

Perhaps not my first, perhaps not even my 50th but a young memory when I was but a tadpole I went to an art gallery that skimmed the side of the river. Grandeous with a Mr whippy ice cream van parked close enough to get sticky fingers we climbed the stair to the entrance I don’t recall. It’s a possibility that I was still finishing off my flake or not concentrating entirely but I was struck by modern art. A canvass of deoxygenated blood red with a smear of black. This car crash on the wall, I did not or could not read its name.

amanda_dcosta 15-Jul-06/3:44 AM
This reads more like a summary-in-a-nut-shell piece. Or in fact it doesn't read much like a poem. You've got what you want to present, but in my opinion, your presentation needs fixing.




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