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ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY (Free verse) by Gopakumar
Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet a plain ground it is For all our plays and fights; Indeed, enigma of nature – it is. Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet the great bowl seldom spills Though waves lashes and retreats; Indeed, enigma of nature – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man’s rockets reach space And return to enrich him; Indeed, wonder of science – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man could split atoms And steal the hidden energy; Indeed, wonder of science – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man’s rockets hit cities And rip apart bodies and minds; Indeed, beastliness of man – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man could split humanity And build walls all around; Indeed, beastliness of man – it is. Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet can shake when it wants Turning temples to rubbles; Indeed, fury of nature – it is. Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet can splash its bowl when it wants Swallowing all that comes in the way; Indeed, fury of nature – it is.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10266
Posted: July 15, 2006 12:09 PM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2006 12:09 PM PDT
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[7] amanda_dcosta @ 202.164.140.187 | 15-Jul-06/7:01 PM | Reply
First of all... welcome to poemranker Gopakumar. Hope you enjoy this site and all the critiques that you'll come across.

To begin with this piece.... I don't fancy this sort of repetitive style much. However, I'll set that aside and say, that you've got an idea of what you want to write and it's presentation is fairly good.
[n/a] CherokeeRoseLoggins @ 67.140.224.214 | 17-Jul-06/11:34 AM | Reply
A good concept, and with very good construction. So much truth in what you have written here. "beastliness of man," the cause of it all to start with. And I am not refering to the gender, but man, as in a whole, the human race. And the fury of nature, I guess because I am 3/4 Native American, or perhaps others may believe the same, but I do believe nature gets angry and lashes out.
[5] Dovina @ 12.72.36.192 | 17-Jul-06/2:48 PM | Reply
Much too repeatative to carry what little interest there is. These are commonly heard statements that might be made interesting if couched in something unique.
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