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ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY (Free verse) by Gopakumar

Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet a plain ground it is For all our plays and fights; Indeed, enigma of nature – it is. Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet the great bowl seldom spills Though waves lashes and retreats; Indeed, enigma of nature – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man’s rockets reach space And return to enrich him; Indeed, wonder of science – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man could split atoms And steal the hidden energy; Indeed, wonder of science – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man’s rockets hit cities And rip apart bodies and minds; Indeed, beastliness of man – it is. Home on the Globe Grave inside the Globe Yet man could split humanity And build walls all around; Indeed, beastliness of man – it is. Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet can shake when it wants Turning temples to rubbles; Indeed, fury of nature – it is. Rotates the Globe Revolves the Globe Yet can splash its bowl when it wants Swallowing all that comes in the way; Indeed, fury of nature – it is.

amanda_dcosta 15-Jul-06/7:01 PM
First of all... welcome to poemranker Gopakumar. Hope you enjoy this site and all the critiques that you'll come across.

To begin with this piece.... I don't fancy this sort of repetitive style much. However, I'll set that aside and say, that you've got an idea of what you want to write and it's presentation is fairly good.




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