Re: a comment on Words by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	18-Aug-05/10:15 AM
The word at the start of s2 is "Resting" so I don't understand. I hate to see you pissed off and will do anything to make you happy (almost).
Re: a comment on How Angels Sleep by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	18-Aug-05/10:10 AM
That works for me too. I think all the stanzas have a submissive beat. The angel is submissive to the Teacher and to his task. The woman is submissive to being comforted by the angel, even as he fails. And the woman in the last verse, who is finally comforted, is submissive to the angel. Could you explain what you mean? The full stop at the end of s2 is there for grammar’s sake. But I see how it breaks the flow, and may do well to disappear.
Re: How Angels Sleep by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	18-Aug-05/10:05 AM
It flows beatifully except for the last line. Needs one more beat I think. "and she knew he understood(Dadum)." PS. beatifully was a pun.
Re: Fading.+/ by Lindz14	drnick 24.176.15.223	18-Aug-05/9:58 AM
The world is filled with assholes and idiots, don't let them bring you down. I'm glad it seems as though you've come to that conclusion yourself, rock on.
Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	18-Aug-05/9:17 AM
See usage note for "He" at Dictionary.com I don't think your either racist or a chauvinist but I do think "Everyone has his own problems" is chauvinistic in the tradition of so many other words that put him and not her into the words spoken by MANkind. The immigrant comment you must admit did appear to have an ever so slight racist undertone. "We all have our own problems" sounds fine to me and maybe even is a little more self-inclusive.
Re: The Giant Verse by drnick	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	18-Aug-05/8:15 AM
This is a pretty chillin poem man..... "Gunshot wounds to the heart tend, To rain less than they pour, A reality not occured well in, The land of unhinged doors," That's pretty intense -9- Lindz14
Re: Outsider by Miggy	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	18-Aug-05/8:13 AM
Hardcore -8- Lindz14
Re: Transfer by Miggy	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	18-Aug-05/8:11 AM
It's your thang -7- Lindz14
Re: Home by Bethy	Bobjim 143.167.132.21	18-Aug-05/7:12 AM
Last few lines don't seem to fit as well as the rest, particularly the penultimate. Seems to me like "She'd do anything" would work better, but it's your poem. And I still give you a -9-
Re: Ain,t Life Fuckin Great,(part2 The Stone Man) by Bethy	Bobjim 143.167.132.21	18-Aug-05/7:06 AM
Fantastic. A privilege to read. -10- and favourite.
Re: The Stone Man by Bethy	Bobjim 143.167.132.21	18-Aug-05/7:04 AM
Very poignant.
Re: a comment on The burden of faith by Bobjim	Bobjim 143.167.132.21	18-Aug-05/7:03 AM
Curious. May I ask why?
Re: The Story of Our Lives by woodstock20000	Bobjim 143.167.132.21	18-Aug-05/6:55 AM
Ooh. Philosophical poetry. I like. -8-
Re: Yellow Leather Innards by PsydewaysTears	Bobjim 143.167.132.21	18-Aug-05/6:53 AM
How odd. -8-
Re: Little Orange Petal Flower by i_am_the_popsicle	drnick 24.176.15.223	18-Aug-05/1:55 AM
It reminds me of the seasonal-depression I expierience. The winter is horrible. The summer is awesome. You're poem is alright.
Re: My Mornings were Filled with Nightmares and Pies by T. Jonathron Remp	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	17-Aug-05/4:39 PM
Wow...This is great -10- Lindz14
Re: Doesn't Hurt Me by Miggy	i_am_the_popsicle 205.188.116.139	17-Aug-05/4:35 PM
I'm not trying to sound like an elitist because it isn't bad, it just doesn't sound unlike anything I've heard before, if you get what I'm saying
Re: a killer world by AM I EVIL?	AM I EVIL? 24.70.95.203	17-Aug-05/4:29 PM
i think its good u have to try hard to forget me........o and thanx for the lesson
Re: I hate you too U2 by D. $ Fontera	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	17-Aug-05/4:13 PM
Why am I paying you to give me the willies?
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	17-Aug-05/4:11 PM
My first instinct was -ace. then I went and read the other comments. stupid me. I agree with <~>. I disagree with Mona Lisa and Shuush.