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Ain,t Life Fuckin Great,(part2 The Stone Man) (Free verse) by Bethy
He is my brother with cold blue eyes he looks in wonder where there are no skies There are no trees There are no bees There are no flies Only silent cries I touch his hand and sit with him He can,t find himself in his house of chains He sits by choice with no voice and wonders why his life went by He can,t feel his fingers he can feel his toes he can,t feel the sweat drippin from his nose so many changes in his life got stoned one day and lost his wife Now he sits and stares at nice clean walls and looks at white coats going up and down halls They feed him pills and apple juice Then they tuck him in tell him to lay quiet til mornin I come by and see him nearly every day Ain,t life fuckin great!!! is all he says

Up the ladder: Mentor
Down the ladder: A Truth About Mortals

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.806824
Overall Rank: 1659
Posted: August 4, 2005 8:37 AM PDT; Last modified: August 4, 2005 8:37 AM PDT
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[10] pennymarie @ 4.246.249.247 | 4-Aug-05/11:21 AM | Reply
wow... ain't life full of saddness and then we hear their cries... that was awsome! loved it

Penny
[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.221 > pennymarie | 4-Aug-05/1:42 PM | Reply
Thank you Penny... and yes life can be very FULL at times... Bethy :)
[8] | Broken | @ 202.156.2.82 | 5-Aug-05/8:24 AM | Reply
Aww .. this is sad ...
[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.211 > | Broken | | 5-Aug-05/12:01 PM | Reply
Yes Broken...it is sad...sad everyday... Bethy:)
[9] T. Jonathron Remp @ 128.252.229.185 | 5-Aug-05/8:28 AM | Reply
Good show *9*
[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.211 > T. Jonathron Remp | 5-Aug-05/12:02 PM | Reply
Thank you Jon...Bethy :)
[7] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 5-Aug-05/1:46 PM | Reply
A sad sentiment. It would be nice if the rhyming structure of the first verse could be continued in all verses, but it's better not to force it.
[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.198 > Dovina | 5-Aug-05/2:27 PM | Reply
Thank you Dovina...a poem like this one has a flow of its own...so i went with the flow...and your right...forcing it would have made it unreal...Bethy :)
[9] RGSsparky @ 81.136.193.42 | 8-Aug-05/12:37 PM | Reply
Nice poem,
Sad story.
Krazy Combo :D
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[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.234 > RGSsparky | 9-Aug-05/12:10 PM | Reply
Nice brother
Sad story
Were both crazy..
Thank you Sparky :) Bethy :)
[n/a] Stephen Robins @ 84.13.16.96 | 9-Aug-05/2:34 PM | Reply
Clever, Sad and droopy.
[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.246 > Stephen Robins | 18-Aug-05/3:34 PM | Reply
Thank you Stephen...:) Bethy
[10] Bobjim @ 143.167.132.21 | 18-Aug-05/7:06 AM | Reply
Fantastic. A privilege to read. -10- and favourite.
[n/a] Bethy @ 24.222.32.246 > Bobjim | 18-Aug-05/3:36 PM | Reply
Awww shucks...you just made my day Bobjim...Thankyou...:) :) :) Bethy
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