Re: Words by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	17-Aug-05/4:04 PM
9.999 the word (word) at the start of s-2 really pisses me off. Word?
Re: a comment on Storm Damage by Caducus	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	17-Aug-05/3:52 PM
Not necessarily, Caducus. One does not know how badly the water will sting untill they've gathered their cojones to jump from the high dive. 10 for that alone. Love the first stanza. Thought a favorite poet of yours had passed.
Re: Written while Kayaking by Sasha	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	17-Aug-05/3:31 PM
I suggest, kill s-3 and s-4, save the penultimate and attach it to the bottom of s-2. Leave the end.
Re: How Angels Sleep by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	17-Aug-05/3:15 PM
please drop the full stop at the end of s-2. some stanzas have a submissive beat others don't. why? I got interchangeability between man/god/angels. For some reason that works for me.
Re: Who I am by Butterfly1120	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	17-Aug-05/1:38 PM
Pretty hardcore -7- Lindz14
Re: As I sit alone by baby_d	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	17-Aug-05/1:33 PM
Good Job -8- Lindz14
Re: Angel by Butterfly1120	Lindz14 65.93.139.23	17-Aug-05/1:29 PM
This is great -8- Lindz14
Re: The Story of Our Lives by woodstock20000	Bethy 24.222.32.211	17-Aug-05/12:14 PM
good poem...how about this for a last line... In the life hereafter...;) I really like this...its a fav!!! Bethy
Re: The burden of faith by Bobjim	Bethy 24.222.32.211	17-Aug-05/12:10 PM
Yes, God did enter my mind...but I was kinda thinking about my Dad...:) Bethy
Re: Puck by whispern_smoke_wisp	Bethy 24.222.32.211	17-Aug-05/12:04 PM
hehehe...I made a mistake once...but I was wrong...lol cool poem :) Bethy
Re: Little Orange Petal Flower by i_am_the_popsicle	Bethy 24.222.32.211	17-Aug-05/12:01 PM
With the changing seasons, your spirit dies then is reborn...its sad, but then if we could all be little orange flowers...we could refresh ourselves seasonally and be new again...sounds good eh...lol :) :) Bethy
Re: Storm Damage by Caducus	Bethy 24.222.32.168	17-Aug-05/11:50 AM
Verry Good....:) Bethy
Re: a comment on Little Orange Petal Flower by i_am_the_popsicle	i_am_the_popsicle 205.188.117.13	17-Aug-05/11:45 AM
thankyou, but tell me, how is it sad?
Re: Little Orange Petal Flower by i_am_the_popsicle	Bethy 24.222.32.168	17-Aug-05/11:43 AM
Nice...yet sad...:) Bethy
Re: Yellow Leather Innards by PsydewaysTears	Bethy 24.222.32.168	17-Aug-05/11:41 AM
Jeepers...I like this poem...very flowing...yet the subject is a little on the interesting side...:) Bethy
Re: a killer world by AM I EVIL?	Bobjim 143.167.132.31	17-Aug-05/4:34 AM
Oh dear. All in all, I think I wouldn't notice you were gone and I'm trying my hardest to forget. Also, giraffe has an 'e' and in the penultimate line it should be you're not your.
Re: a comment on Written while Kayaking by Sasha	Bobjim 143.167.132.31	17-Aug-05/4:27 AM
I know that, it's just not as enjoyable to read as the first verse.
Re: a comment on The burden of faith by Bobjim	Bobjim 143.167.177.29	17-Aug-05/3:33 AM
It should have been 'could be eroded'. And it must be taken with the previous few lines, which talk about God only revealing himself through other people. You can't use Biblical references against this line because the Bible is the words of others afterall. If you didn't believe the disciples through the Bible, wouldn't that be eroding your faith?
Re: a comment on Hiding by x babie alison x	x babie alison x 162.83.214.183	16-Aug-05/7:48 PM
Your right about the prose comment. However, im debating whether the stoned comment was a good thing or a bad thing. Ill have to try it sometime and see for myself.
Re: a comment on Written while Kayaking by Sasha	Dovina 69.175.32.104	16-Aug-05/6:59 PM
BTW, "posesss what beauty you percieve" contains two misspelled words.