Re: a comment on Written while Kayaking by Sasha	Dovina 69.175.32.104	16-Aug-05/6:57 PM
Yes you've said that very clearly and nicely in "it’s a kind of comfort to believe you see yourself with foreign eyes and know that you posesss what beauty you percieve." The problem is there's no link to the kayak, or a very weak link. The tone changes abruptly in Verse 2.
Re: Poem for a Snowstorm by crooked_smile	Sasha 68.49.8.49	16-Aug-05/5:59 PM
This is a bad apostrophe
Re: a comment on Written while Kayaking by Sasha	Sasha 68.49.8.49	16-Aug-05/5:58 PM
The idea is that while Kayaking it feels as though you've got such power and freedom whereas really you're just in water on a boat with no more power than one on land. The rest of the poem takes an objective view to that kind of grandiose self-perception
Re: The burden of faith by Bobjim	Dovina 69.175.32.104	16-Aug-05/5:47 PM
The first seven lines are good. After that, you add something to the requirements for faith faith, something unnecessary in my opinion - faith in certain people. I don't see how "the core of my faith would be eroded" if I fail to take someone's word for something. Doesn't the Bible tell us to judge these things?
Re: a comment on How Angels Sleep by Dovina	Bethy 24.222.32.167	16-Aug-05/5:31 PM
very sincere...its very good...I enjoy everyones poetry...and being rated is a bonus for me...I have been writing for nearly 30yrs...and a number would never stop me...I like the responses I get...and the help...I tell everyone the truth...or I just do not vote or submit a response...:) :) Bethy
Re: Poem for a Snowstorm by crooked_smile	Dovina 69.175.32.104	16-Aug-05/4:12 PM
I think this could be said in fewer words, and in more words spelled right. You've got the makings of a poem here, but before posting, please look for repetition and loose ends.
Re: Storm Damage by Caducus	Caducus 172.214.67.16	16-Aug-05/3:56 AM
God help me if Dark Angel sees this.
Re: How Angels Sleep by Dovina	Bobjim 143.167.177.3	16-Aug-05/3:20 AM
Nice poem. Not my view on angels, but I won't let that detract from it. -8-
Re: a comment on Written while Kayaking by Sasha	Bobjim 143.167.177.3	16-Aug-05/3:17 AM
I must concur. As a kayaker myself, the first verse had me all the way. After that I just tailed off to skimming rather than reading.
Re: A Prayer by that_funny_girl	AM I EVIL? 24.70.95.203	16-Aug-05/12:43 AM
who hasnt asked god what are they here for
Re: Because Life is a Game by that_funny_girl	AM I EVIL? 24.70.95.203	16-Aug-05/12:41 AM
i like this one....very truthful
Re: Car Ride by that_funny_girl	AM I EVIL? 24.70.95.203	16-Aug-05/12:38 AM
i like the poem itself....but i dont understand the ending
Re: Crazy by that_funny_girl	AM I EVIL? 24.70.95.203	16-Aug-05/12:35 AM
sounds to me like u have been betrayed from what ive read in ur poems
Re: Sadness by that_funny_girl	AM I EVIL? 24.70.95.203	16-Aug-05/12:31 AM
fukin loved it very detaild
Re: a comment on The Box by PsydewaysTears	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Aug-05/7:23 PM
No, not Moses. Funny-sad. One upset mom.
Re: a comment on The Box by PsydewaysTears	PsydewaysTears 69.252.193.18	15-Aug-05/6:44 PM
http://www.ebaumsworld.com/videos/mean_mom.html
Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Aug-05/6:21 PM
Almost you.
Re: a comment on How Angels Sleep by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Aug-05/5:04 PM
I think the proper response is “Thank you.” So thank you. Some poemrankers come down hard on this kind of exchange. They say it’s just trading praise or that a “thank you” is simply fodder for more praise. They even say that praise such as yours is given only to stimulate like flattery on your poems. Ignore their ranting. You liked the poem and I’m glad. I believe it’s really that sincere.
Re: How Angels Sleep by Dovina	Bethy 24.222.32.147	15-Aug-05/4:24 PM
I really love this Dovina...its beautiful...:) Bethy
Re: Puck by whispern_smoke_wisp	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Aug-05/3:31 PM
I don't see why that makes it "a good thing."