Yes you've said that very clearly and nicely in "it’s a kind of comfort to believe you see yourself with foreign eyes and know that you posesss what beauty you percieve." The problem is there's no link to the kayak, or a very weak link. The tone changes abruptly in Verse 2.

The idea is that while Kayaking it feels as though you've got such power and freedom whereas really you're just in water on a boat with no more power than one on land. The rest of the poem takes an objective view to that kind of grandiose self-perception

very sincere...its very good...I enjoy everyones poetry...and being rated is a bonus for me...I have been writing for nearly 30yrs...and a number would never stop me...I like the responses I get...and the help...I tell everyone the truth...or I just do not vote or submit a response...:) :) Bethy

I must concur. As a kayaker myself, the first verse had me all the way. After that I just tailed off to skimming rather than reading.

No, not Moses. Funny-sad. One upset mom.

Almost you.

I think the proper response is “Thank you.” So thank you. Some poemrankers come down hard on this kind of exchange. They say it’s just trading praise or that a “thank you” is simply fodder for more praise. They even say that praise such as yours is given only to stimulate like flattery on your poems. Ignore their ranting. You liked the poem and I’m glad. I believe it’s really that sincere.