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a killer world (Free verse) by AM I EVIL?
if my world is a vampire why do i stick my neck out like a giraff's? just to get it bit and have the life sucked out of me so here i am left for the dead i'm on my back thinking did i have a good enough run to call it quits now? if I died here would I be remembered? would anyone even care, would they even notice i was gone? should i fight for my life? these are questions a dying man askes himself i've been told your most alive confronting death now i understand this vulgar statement

Down the ladder: Betrayed Trust

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Weighted score: 4.602657
Overall Rank: 12513
Posted: August 17, 2005 3:05 AM PDT; Last modified: August 17, 2005 3:06 AM PDT
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[3] Bobjim @ 143.167.132.31 | 17-Aug-05/4:34 AM | Reply
Oh dear. All in all, I think I wouldn't notice you were gone and I'm trying my hardest to forget. Also, giraffe has an 'e' and in the penultimate line it should be you're not your.
[n/a] AM I EVIL? @ 24.70.95.203 | 17-Aug-05/4:29 PM | Reply
i think its good u have to try hard to forget me........o and thanx for the lesson
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 | 19-Aug-05/11:12 AM | Reply
The only thing more annoying than Billy Corgan is somebody quoting Billy Corgan. If you lose that line I'll move you up a notch.

That'll put you at notch one.

Sorry I've been waiting a long time to use that line on someone and I figured I couldn't make you any more depressed.

I've been in that place before and the only advice I have is get tough and use capital letters when you start sentences.
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