poemranker ::Only You by hatedestruction

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Free verse № 115481

Only You

by hatedestruction

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Nov 2004 · 2 comments

All that I've got and all that I remember has caused me grief. I refuse to admit I have come to What this feeling is and now I turn to face you and smile away taunting, laughing at only you. Any time I try and let myself breathe I forget that you're here. Sometimes when I close my eyes and wish that I could do how we've wanted and now I fall too close to you and another day sighing, slipping for only you.

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[5] Dovina 12-Nov-04/9:24 AM Reply
You have tried to relate an emotion you have felt to your readers using what you think are logical bridges and similis, but they fail logically. Most readers of poetry appreciate both emotion and logic.
[0] horus8 12-Nov-04/4:33 PM Reply
Just when I thought shit had been explored in all its carefully packed splendor, I step in this.