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As I sit alone (Free verse) by baby_d As I sit alone in [recollection] of a life, I feel the pain she must
have felt.
A voice that did'nt exist.
As I sit alone, I sit with her;-
Everything said has been forgotten, But I still heard.
No one knew,
No one cared.
As I sit alone, I sit with her- now I watch the sunset,
I see her beautiful face,
I see something I can never have again.
I can see and feel her pain.
I can feel myself in pain.
As I sit with her- how could GOD have let this happen?
She is now gone for ever, slipped away, from my grasp.
I can no longer live like this.
A part of me is missing, never to return.
As I sit alone
I sit with her.
Up the ladder:
They who would have me forget
Down the ladder:
We Are Born
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Posted: November 9, 2003 12:21 PM PST; Last modified: November 10, 2003 2:41 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.5827065 Overall Rank: 2350 Comments:
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sliver @ 65.178.241.98
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9-Nov-03/4:44 PM
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Spellcheck your stuff once in awhile, that way you at least seem to know what you're doing. What is this about? Your Grandma, a miscarraige,?
Your bickering has given me a heavy headache, tsk tsk seems 2 much sparetime at ya hands:o)
Apostrophe misplaced. I think I see what you were trying to do here. Try again.
Try something to connect the reader, not a cliche, cliches have long since lost their evocative power.
Many people have written poems like this, give or take a few words here and there. Why should we like yours?
Good Job -8-
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