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I hate you too U2 (Free verse) by D. $ Fontera
A spider Long-legged and hairy Crawled up the back of my leg my neck my head And it forced its tingling body Far into the depths of my ear Now shivering I shake tears from my swollen eyes As I feel his footsteps Send a loud spidery beat Throughout my sinuses My brain As the lump in my throat tightens I press my pinkie finger Into the canal And I feel a wetness The crunch of spider flesh A shattered exoskeleton And no way to get it out Then Out of nowhere comes Bono With his wailing notes And I cry again Only this time in horror Disgust Pain

Up the ladder: Today is another day
Down the ladder: metaphor

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4110
Posted: August 9, 2005 1:18 PM PDT; Last modified: August 9, 2005 1:18 PM PDT
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[8] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 | 14-Aug-05/1:17 AM | Reply
Hey, no one's done that wordplay before!
[8] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 | 14-Aug-05/1:18 AM | Reply
PS-I liked the spider-in-the-ear. But any poem that uses multiple linebreaks for dramatic pauses or the passing of time is an automatic minus-2. Sorry, those are the rules.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.100.67 | 17-Aug-05/4:13 PM | Reply
Why am I paying you to give me the willies?
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