Re: Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/12:56 PM
There is something horrific about childrens stories that you only discover as an adult. There's a little too much of a gap between images and the last stanza comes across as a shock gimmick.
Re: Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/12:47 PM
Considerate of you to stop before Davey asked Katie for a BJ. I kinda like this though, really.
Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/12:39 PM
What's the -- after "light" for?
Re: Sunday Legs by D. $ Fontera	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/12:31 PM
"Your hair sideways like conch-shell swirls" is a great line. Get at least two more lines like that and it's an automatic 10 from me.
Re: midnight feast by pollywolly	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/12:20 PM
Much like ecargo's tiger poem, your's starts something very interesting but it seems like it wnts to tell us more.
Re: a comment on Racial Hate by Glasseyez	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/11:32 AM
That's great but I'm afraid after doing some research I discovered that it turns out when the American Indian first migrated here they weren't the first. The Asians had been there first. They had populated most of the continent. So the Indians Just killed them all and took over. So it turns out what man is and what he thinks he is are usaully not quite the same thing.
Re: Hailing Miriam by Ranger	Niphredil 132.68.204.141	29-Jan-06/11:30 AM
It reads beautifully. A little long perhaps, but each individual line is worth it.
Re: Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta	Niphredil 132.68.204.141	29-Jan-06/11:26 AM
Sorry, but it sounds like a threesome, and an exceptionally sweet and sticky one at that.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	Niphredil 132.68.204.141	29-Jan-06/11:23 AM
Didn't see the original, but this one is great. :-)
Re: a comment on After Rain by Niphredil	Niphredil 132.68.204.141	29-Jan-06/11:19 AM
Thank you. I always read 'finally' as a two-syllable word... perhaps that's stretching the meter a bit. Perhaps, 'At last the time had come, they knew, when each among them should' would be better? Sorry for the punchline wreaking havoc, guys, but this was written a little tongue-in-cheek and I couldn't resist. :-)
Re: How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/11:08 AM
Yes and please check out my poem "Penny Loafer Blues". Your poems good but it feels like it needs more, like it's just getting started.
Re: How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	29-Jan-06/10:10 AM
I'll vote an -8-. A nice piece to think about. the wild cat with the mastodons. Very imaginative. I've been trying to think of something different when I came across your poem. Pretty good. Now for taking your advice,....lol... but I did. Check out my poem 'such is a child's heart'. I'd value criticism more than a vote. Do me the honors and check it out. Thanks.
Re: a comment on Racial Hate by Glasseyez	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/10:08 AM
So everything in nature isn't equal or of equal importance?
Re: a comment on Racial Hate by Glasseyez	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	29-Jan-06/9:56 AM
Believing everything is equally important in nature is very good. But, feeling and experiencing the reverse is quite another issue.
Re: a comment on Racial Hate by Glasseyez	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/9:49 AM
Oh, Ok. I think I know what you mean now. I'm part American Indian and for thousands of years they have lived without racism not only because of their simularities but because they believed everything is equally important in nature. Am I on the right track?
Re: a comment on Racial Hate by Glasseyez	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	29-Jan-06/9:38 AM
Alchemy, racism is unfortunately a biproduct of 'evolution'. But the problem lies in the fact that a lot of importance has been given to the differences rather than what we are. There are a lot of prejudices against people of varying nationalities.And just because one may not be white, (figuratively speaking), it doesn't mean he doesn't know how to be a human being, or he loves less. I can tell you that my Indian brothers and sisters are treated with less dignity in many parts of the world. Once a person knows that he/she is an Indian, there's immediate discrimination. In many circumstances they're even treated as 'untouchables' or even 'a nuisance'. I can even vouch that for the blacks. I've witnessed a couple of uncomfortable situations which have made me think about this a lot. I was quite liked Dovina's poem - 'mixed Quartet' - why don't we all sing together in unison and harmony with our differences rather than play in a one-man band eg. Amanda goes solo. Think about it. Would you take a second look at me if you were to meet me in person?
Re: a comment on Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/7:12 AM
Unless it's in a perfect vacuum with absolute zero gravity then nothing will go straight. From http://www.findarticles.com/p/articles/mi_m1134/is_n1_v106/ai_19318730 "The action of a gravitational lens is not restricted to visible light. If light takes the shortest distance through space-time between two points (which it does), and if space-time itself is curved (which it is), then the path of light will curve along with it, regardless of whether the light is composed of gamma rays, X-rays, ultraviolet, infrared, microwaves, or radio waves. And, most importantly, the cosmic stuff that causes the bending can be made of absolutely anything, as long as it contains enough mass to curve space-time measurably in its vicinity." "There are no straight lines in nature, only areas of color one against another." - Monet
Re: Racial Hate by Glasseyez	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	29-Jan-06/6:26 AM
What color is the heart again? http://tuberose.com/Graphics/Bypass%20surgery1.gif Blood is red usually but of different shades. If you think I'm nitpicking you're right, which is my point. Although yes we are the same on a grander scale, we are also different in little ways. We have evolved to become sensetive to these tiny differences so that we can better identify each other(so you don't go hugging every old man you see on the street and calling him grandpappy). Racism is just an unfortunate biproduct of an essential evolutionary trait. Maybe if geneticists learn how to turn blacks white or whites black then we'll all be better off but I doubt it.
Re: Reckoning by <~>	Ranger 62.252.32.15	29-Jan-06/6:23 AM
I'm sure there's something intelligent I can say here, but I can't think what it might be. Nicely written, anyway.
Re: Technology makes memories, photo album, circa 1970 by <~>	Ranger 62.252.32.15	29-Jan-06/6:17 AM
'Like a disciplined fruit'...yes, imaginative certainly.