regarding some deleted poem...	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/7:24 AM
uh...not one of my favorites...sorry.
Re: Roundabout by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/7:44 AM
No capitalization, no sentence structure...so why use periods?! I would drop them. Use puncutaion throughout, or don't use it at all... Dissonance? as in:> the opposite of harmony, discord, disagreement, conflict, difference, or difference of opinion? (Is that the word you intended to use?...Just wondering.) The only glaring change I would make would be to put "warming our body" together in one line, then "and pushing the mind into" in the next line.(maybe even drop the "and") (As it is, seems like a typo, and put together it has more 'punch'.) here> "warming our body and pushing the mind into" ...and shouldn't it be bodies, since you are talking about a group...but maybe not perhaps, if you are collectively calling the group a body. Interesting poem...I like it, gave you a fairly high score for it, based on its content and imagery,though it has a few flaws.
regarding some deleted poem...	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/7:47 AM
ugh...sorry..."I guess not"?! "I shan't"...man...I was going to just rehit randome, again, and not leave a comment...but I feel I should comment to what I read, as that's why it is here...so...sorry...this sucks.
Re: mental collides by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/7:54 AM
This made me chuckle...clever. I am undecided about the ending "not yet." Not sure if I would have put that in or dropped it. I love your style...how format follows the thought trippingly along...I just love it! (and I can be quite a critical _itch!)LOL.
Re: Take Four by NanceXToo	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:00 AM
LOL....funny...tragic...glaringly naked...and refreshingly honest, albiet cynical...and a little scary. Very good! Gave it a 9...are you sure You are not the perfectionist? LOL!
Re: the room's a'spinnin' by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:01 AM
LOL...cute!
regarding some deleted poem...	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:02 AM
?...I don't get it...and don't have the desire to...sorry.
Re: paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:06 AM
WOO-HOO! *clap *clap...take a bow! (Except...don't capitalizations count for anything? If you used punctuation, then why not capital letters?) Gave you a nine anyway....I don't give 10's...at least not yet!
Re: overwhelmed by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:10 AM
Again no capitalization! Every single little thing in perfect place, and yet, no capitalization! Fix (or get over your aversion to) capitalization...and then submit your stuff! I have read enough to be of the opinion that you should submit for publication...no editor needed! (EXCEPT the lack of capitalization!) 9 again...waiting for that impossible chance to say "10!"
Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:18 AM
*smirk...hmmm....
regarding some deleted poem...	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/8:41 AM
Is there a name for this type of poem?
Re: I Can Write A Wrong, But I Can't Right A Poem by horus8	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:00 AM
LMAO...AWESOME...Woo-Hoo...What a strange and comical tid-bit of diabolical fun!
Re: Not All Scars by coffeeangel316	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:02 AM
...someone gimme a rope...ugh...this was...uhm...keep writing...maybe time will do something.
Re: comment-ary by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:07 AM
hmmm...would like to peer in and see the rest...be a fly on the wall of your mind, go around the corner and watch from the shadows. And I am not usually much of a voyuer...voyeur...voyeuor...*shoot! (However you spell it!)..or am I? Are we all? Here peering into the minds, souls, and thoughts, that are annonomously (?!SP!) bared to the public for view...
Re: my hunger has become a hunger for revenge by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:10 AM
LMAO...funny little piece...needs some cleaning up though...May I offer you a napkin? A period here or there, a capital here and there...but a fun read.
regarding some deleted poem...	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:14 AM
You contraindict yourself here...you say it wasn't meant to last, then act as if there are broken hearts...which is it? "keep on keeping on" is so cliche', maybe change it to> I wasn't wrong...something along that line...I don't know...I probably wouldn't bother re-editing this...it would hit the trash, if it was mine...but then again, it isn't...so do what you will with it.
Re: appropriation by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:17 AM
Truly...what do we have that is really our own? Do we not all feast upon tidbits and morseld, ingest it all, until it all mingles and becomes part of who we are...and then purge ourselves of it all upon the page? gave it a 9.
Re: A Moment in Time by nentwined	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:23 AM
Some might say it's alittle on the gushy side...but I like it! Kinda hypnotic...and that fits the piece...plus...a kindred spirit I find, writing those words. Dominant minds...hmm...responsibility comes with it. Lover's kiss of rain...beautifully erotic and rather sensual piece in an intellectual way....yes...I like it. 9 again.
Re: Lonely Tears by broken_wing11	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:25 AM
sigh...parts are good, and with some cleaning up maybe this could be something better...the last four lines were the worst.
regarding some deleted poem...	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.135	11-Jul-05/9:29 AM
one thing I see throughout your stuff...I wish you would keep to one subject...one thought...we don't need you to solve the situation by the ending. "Knowing that the pain won't subside/no longer living my life with negativity" Which is this song about...pick one! I liked>"Drowning in the water that I can’t tread Drowning in the tears held up in my head"