Free verse № 74969
paint me a poem (try 2)
paint me a picture with countable stanzas,
colors that rhyme directly and slant,
paint me a plot that stands up for itself,
or a moment in time inherently deep;
paint me the lines that twist their own language,
the form a bit playful, but in essence quite deep;
paint me a picture that explains its own being,
then takes that same being, and twists it around.
paint me a poem that's naked when clothed,
with innocent yang and experienced yin,
make it sing loudly the chords of the soul
and paint it again, and again, and again.
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paint me a picture with countable stanzas,
colors that rhyme directly and slant,
paint me the lines that twist their own language,
that form a new form when rendered as chant,
paint me a picture that makes its own being,
make it sing loudly the chords of the soul
and paint it again, and again, and again.
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The cadence is flawless and that should erase any perceived awkwardness.
Granted, the perspective is a bit... whats the word? 'Commanding'? 'Pretentious' is too strong - whatever; it works fine to my ear.
Rock on.
(ok, so why wasn't THAT in my bag six hundred poems ago)?
10.
Actually.
I'm not.
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