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paint me a poem (try 2) (Free verse) by nentwined

paint me a picture with countable stanzas, colors that rhyme directly and slant, paint me a plot that stands up for itself, or a moment in time inherently deep; paint me the lines that twist their own language, the form a bit playful, but in essence quite deep; paint me a picture that explains its own being, then takes that same being, and twists it around. paint me a poem that's naked when clothed, with innocent yang and experienced yin, make it sing loudly the chords of the soul and paint it again, and again, and again.

nentwined 16-Dec-20/3:15 PM
Revisiting to try a new thing. Reading it out, I stumbled in a few places. Also adjusting for timing... Do I edit this into oblivion or make a v3 that is its own thing?

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paint me a picture with countable stanzas,
colors that rhyme directly and slant,
paint me the lines that twist their own language,
that form a new form when rendered as chant,
paint me a picture that makes its own being,
make it sing loudly the chords of the soul
and paint it again, and again, and again.

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