| Re: Hobo. by SupremeDreamer |
ARTIE 127.0.0.1 |
7-Apr-15/8:03 PM |
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Fuck you who looks down on me--
when Rome falls, you'll be fucked
while I'll finally be set free.
Set your own fucking condescending self free. Vulgarity obviously hasn't worked. Look around and realize, you shackle yourself.
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| Re: Some of us by daniella |
Y2kSlamPoet 127.0.0.1 |
13-Apr-15/4:01 PM |
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I'll give you a ten if you can condense this into a haiku. :P
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| Re: Among The Stars by ARTIE |
Y2kSlamPoet ::1 |
13-Apr-15/4:06 PM |
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My heart speaks not.
It pulses with pulsars
while drinkin' at the bar
Goes cold while I'm hot
'n encourages me
to take another shot
till the last thing I see
is the blasted stars.
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| Re: Psilocybin, and the Tale of a Happy Stoner by ARTIE |
Y2kSlamPoet 127.0.0.1 |
13-Apr-15/4:24 PM |
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pulchritudinous? Wordy. Get rid of it. There's other aspects too that could use polish, and the more I think of it, the less worthy of a nine this is. The title though? SPECTACULAR@!
Just don't get all sour on my seven, aye?
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| Re: Makin' Bacon by NICKDRP |
susanthered 127.0.0.1 |
21-Nov-15/12:57 PM |
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this poem is amazing!!!
I love it...well done!!!!
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| Re: Makin' Bacon by NICKDRP |
susanthered 127.0.0.1 |
21-Nov-15/12:58 PM |
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I bet the guy who wrote this is an amazing person and really great looking....what a hottie!
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| Re: Stripping the willow by ecargo |
Ranger ::1 |
4-Dec-15/3:31 PM |
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ecargo! I wanted to get in touch a while back but had no way. Are you still writing?
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| Re: Deep Translation by T. Jonathron Remp |
impert&ent ::1 |
24-Jan-16/7:54 AM |
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Skating with the rays
Shellfishing suits trackwise trainers
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| Re: Synchronicity by Prince of Void |
impert&ent 127.0.0.1 |
24-Jan-16/7:57 AM |
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| Re: And on and on and on by nentwined |
impert&ent ::1 |
26-Aug-16/8:08 AM |
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Something a bit repetitive here, and title not evocative of the imagery
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| Re: Celui by half.italian |
impert&ent ::1 |
26-Aug-16/8:09 AM |
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Celui? Ce lui? Anyhow, nice evocation of a once in a lifetime fuck.
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| Re: What Bitches? Oh yeah, I'll be talkin major shit. by SupremeDreamer |
daniella ::1 |
15-Jan-17/5:30 PM |
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Diseloquence is your invention
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| Re: Embrace the Politics by impert&ent |
impert&ent 127.0.0.1 |
26-Feb-17/5:38 PM |
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| Re: Ted & Santa Go Gay by Edna Sweetlove |
daniella ::1 |
8-Oct-17/7:25 PM |
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| Re: Pandora's Box by Edna Sweetlove |
daniella ::1 |
8-Oct-17/7:30 PM |
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| Re: Making a Man by Christof |
daniella 127.0.0.1 |
8-Oct-17/9:06 PM |
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i feel the memories biting through. this is lovely. and i love how you are alluding to the inner man and the outer snow man at once...
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| Re: Hey by impert&ent |
Lenore ::1 |
16-Oct-17/1:31 PM |
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| Re: A spectacular poem by a handsome man by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
Lenore 127.0.0.1 |
16-Oct-17/2:07 PM |
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You had me at "coalishly pinched twin sink holes."
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
Lenore ::1 |
16-Oct-17/2:14 PM |
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"I wear only the best" could've been better. Yeah, that line sucks. The rest, flows like stuff that flows good.
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| Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik |
Lenore 127.0.0.1 |
16-Oct-17/2:22 PM |
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I give the comments a 7! Bravo!
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