this is where i would dwell... until your tears, a million salty spheres, rain cold upon the ground.

In the wildest of imagination, a queen would not stoop down to the "sand" to play with a dreamer and that is the very fun denid us for no longer being seven. To call this very fun hell, is to lampoon the heaven e no longer can have with the "sand", simply becos we are grown ups How I would want to be seven again and dream a queen who would take the sand for heaven.

excellent dawg

ramen, a true staple i can warm to from my college days, instant satisfaction in neutral browns with little celebrations of veggies in bright re-hydrated hues.

dont tether yourself to rhyming... let go...

there you go... gettin down and gritty

i still see some clay here...

Not one of my favorites, but i suppose that is because i prefer darker, more, um...sensitive poetry.

Excellent – I especially enjoyed your exceptionally well-placed and correctly used semicolon.

what exactly are you talking about?

For some reason this makes me laugh...

I like it, the no-spaced words are hard to read, ut its got a nice ring to it

is this 3 haikus? cause i think a haiku ONLY has 3 lines???

I really like this one. Not that i dont like it, but do the last lines work with the rest?

no wonder that this one is in the "best" category! Really nice.

1. this isnt exactly deep. 2. Your name seriously scares me 3. okay the rymes need some work yeah, okay, i think a 1 will do.

vivid. The Eve's inheritance or better still the Eve's curse causing pain, bringing life on...this poem is a vivid picture

first utterings... tuff stuff... i know where this comes from, so i know where you can definitely take this wisdom you are scratching at.

correct and keen. i just would like to vibrate more... but this is the first i see of yours.

"Loneliness" is spelt wrong. It's not poetic. Poetry is show, not tell.