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advice (Free verse) by ThePariahDog listen to me
hearken to my words
i speak the truth
and shepherd the herds
to better lives
beyond what you know
so, into your mind
i will sow
all the necessary wisdoms
and learnings in life
whereas love is concerned
to take an adequate wife
believe me
for i speak from experience
with these words
i give you deliverance
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Posted: November 4, 2003 7:08 AM PST; Last modified: November 4, 2003 7:08 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.865529 Overall Rank: 10363 Comments:
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4-Nov-03/7:42 AM
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Almost biblical but hardly poetic
it does have a bigger than life feel - and I'm gonna disagree with the dear with headlights; it is quite poetic (what isn't? Sounds like attitude to me).
I don't really get the bit about taking an adequate wife though - unconvincing our vague, somehow.
ditto to Shuushin's comment
If you paid a guy to read this in a drunk Irish accent? I'd pay to see it. My favourite was "Hearken".
I, for one, had to read the bible several times whilst I was at the private boys shavery. Forced to sing beautiful Psalms in their entireties. Lord, it was a bore, but I believe your mentally retarded approach to preaching (great gimmick by the way) is much better. Because, it really speaks to the underdogs. The mistreated people of a lower more depraved caste in our indifferent society. The illiterate.
first utterings... tuff stuff... i know where this comes from, so i know where you can definitely take this wisdom you are scratching at.
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