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advice (Free verse) by ThePariahDog

listen to me hearken to my words i speak the truth and shepherd the herds to better lives beyond what you know so, into your mind i will sow all the necessary wisdoms and learnings in life whereas love is concerned to take an adequate wife believe me for i speak from experience with these words i give you deliverance

Shuushin 4-Nov-03/8:15 AM
it does have a bigger than life feel - and I'm gonna disagree with the dear with headlights; it is quite poetic (what isn't? Sounds like attitude to me).

I don't really get the bit about taking an adequate wife though - unconvincing our vague, somehow.




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