Tonka trucks, pigtails you can use my favorite one - castles in the sand

rename it with someting to do with fire and you'll almost have something. or a dragon. and add another stanza. btw, "mouth" (as you spell it) should be "muthge"

feel free to give suggestions...i cant spell so youll have to ignore that part. Well, thanks for the comments!

No semicolon after blade. Don't capitalize Your ever. 'Pierces through' is redundant, since piercing means it's breaking through. I personally dislike poems where the narrator is really aware of his/her unstable psychological situation, but this is less heavy-handed than most. Changing 'from thinking what I think' would make it even better.

'to be' in 'once more to be buried' bothers me. I've been looking in Poet's Market at poetry reviews which specialize in minimalism, which I think is where you're headed. You might take a look at 'Indefinite Space' (wings.buffalo.edu/epc/ezines/treehome/tree05/indef_22.html) and 'Raw Dog Press/Post Poems,' (www.freeyellow.com/members/rawdog) among others. See if you can get published.

Very funny! Nice expansion to contraction.

Interesting song.

Sayest Lah Veee!

hmmmn

Very cute!

Nice cat!

Good rythm.

Don't know about this one. It seems forced or maybe too playful.

trite. subject not personalized enough.

The Phantom of the Opera once gave me a hand shandy.

I really like this: "Who is after me My own me after me" lots of originality here.

summer approaches celebrate with poetry - but this is a list. Okay, it is a good list though - what does the last one mean?

thanks...i dont know, does it flow well enough? I cant tell cause its my own poem.

does it sound better if you say fast or slow?

How old are you?