poemranker ::Shower by unouluvme

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Free verse № 92545

Shower

Member since 2004 · Posted 28 Feb 2004 · Edited 2 Apr 2004 · 3 comments

liquid trickling down from my hair to my toes droplets, following curves, my breasts, hips, thighs...desire for a mans gentle touch, wet hair, so warm, slicked to my back, drinking the water, sweet, sweet to my mouth my soap, white with kisses, into the dark red washcloth, smell so inviting, lustfull and sweet, suds down my whole body, neck, arms, breasts, hips, thighs, and quickly my bottom. rinsed fresh, perfectly seen, pure tanned, slim, tall, no virgin...but clean.

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[n/a] unouluvme 28-Feb-04/5:15 PM Reply
thanks...i dont know, does it flow well enough? I cant tell cause its my own poem.
[9] sonawrote 2-Apr-04/7:26 PM Reply
I give a smirk ....so many of us...
[8] Shuushin 2-Apr-04/8:49 PM Reply
a rewrite?