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Free verse № 34179

Shark

by cleverdevice

Member since 2002 · Posted 7 Jan 2003 · 11 comments

I am a shark. GRR GRR GRR I like fish. YUM YUM YUM. I swim in the dark. SWIM SWIM SWIM My tail goes swish SWISH SWISH SWISH. My teeth are like knifes. CRUNCH CRUNCH CRUNCH. My eyes are like coal. BURNING BURNING BURNING. My body rises and dives. UP DOWN UP DOWN UP DOWN. I hunt for a shoal. HUNT HUNT HUNT. There its is! THERE WHERE? THERE. Feeding frenzy!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! A BIGGER SHARK!

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11 comments

[8] Ranger 7-Jan-03/5:09 AM Reply
Hur hur hur
*crackle* KILLER WHALE AT SIX 'O' CLOCK, REPEAT, KILLER WHALE AT SIX...AAAARRRRGGGHHHHH
[8] INTRANSIT 7-Jan-03/6:37 AM Reply
I'll see your shark and raise you
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[7] Caducus 7-Jan-03/8:28 AM Reply
Send this to the Japs it might put them off their sharkfin soup, Thanks for enlightening me in the nature of Sharks.
(Thought this was about salesman) 7
[9] razorgrin 7-Jan-03/10:03 AM Reply
i like sharks and this made me smile.9
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 7-Jan-03/10:41 AM Reply
Knives. The word 'knifes' is the third person singular of the verb 'to knife'. For insance,

"The disgruntled weaver knifes your face with some knives."
[6] Bachus 7-Jan-03/10:53 AM Reply
the little orca said to the poppa orca "faTHER IS THIS INDEED THE DAY KNOW SEALS WOULD FLY? BUT THEN LOOKING UP HE SAW ONE FLY BY, AND IT FLEW WELL".
[7] <~> 13-Jan-03/8:37 AM Reply
funny.
[5] unouluvme 28-Feb-04/5:22 PM Reply
How old are you?
[n/a] cleverdevice › unouluvme 22-Mar-04/7:27 AM Reply
18 next April, but check out some of my other work for maturity.
[5] unouluvme 28-Feb-04/5:25 PM Reply
Not one of my favorites, but i suppose that is because i prefer darker, more, um...sensitive poetry.
[7] nentwined 4-Oct-06/5:57 PM Reply
I think you should split "My body rises and dives / UP DOWN UP DOWN UP DOWN" into "My body rises / UP UP UP / and dives / DOWN DOWN DOWN"

I actually ... this is funny, and not annoying.