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Shark (Free verse) by cleverdevice

I am a shark. GRR GRR GRR I like fish. YUM YUM YUM. I swim in the dark. SWIM SWIM SWIM My tail goes swish SWISH SWISH SWISH. My teeth are like knifes. CRUNCH CRUNCH CRUNCH. My eyes are like coal. BURNING BURNING BURNING. My body rises and dives. UP DOWN UP DOWN UP DOWN. I hunt for a shoal. HUNT HUNT HUNT. There its is! THERE WHERE? THERE. Feeding frenzy!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! A BIGGER SHARK!

nentwined 4-Oct-06/5:57 PM
I think you should split "My body rises and dives / UP DOWN UP DOWN UP DOWN" into "My body rises / UP UP UP / and dives / DOWN DOWN DOWN"

I actually ... this is funny, and not annoying.




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