aliena
on Municipal park by richa
1 Apr 2004, 11:56 PM
what is the fibal verdict? has or have?
Nice poem dicksplat.
"as the dawn begins to fade
brightening up the dusk" How??
Excellent, excellent!!! take a 10 for this poem about my favourite impressionist
Reads fine.
This poem could amaze,
In many different ways,
However if it stays,
I will forfeit my lunch out of my bum before reaching a loo.
Give me a poem less rubbish,
And i will it furnish,
A mark of more than two,
For at the moment it has made me revrse-void my lunch all over my seat.
This poem is gayness personified.
tomcheese,
It appears that you are forever duty bound to remain peripheral.
Oh yeah, I forgot, you're Canadian.
If I knew the origins of any of these movie references, (I guess that's what they are.) I might enjoy the poem more. Still it's good
the imagery includes a definitive female presence. a bull's horns resemble the placement of ovaries and its snout can be compared to something else that's wet and slimy. i don't believe that artists should have to explain their works, so i'll say no more.
Most of the rhymes are forced. You'd do better without them, I think. Still, some good lines, "keep your reasons close to your soul."
Too many redundant lines. A good thought with a touch of ambiguity.
DO
PRINT "GUFF"
LOOP
know what you mean
love it, im an atheist!
i like it
Hi tre ^_^ I thought this was such a cool poeme! i hope you'll read some of mine n tell me what u think!!1
That is the sappiest thing I've ever read. To say the least its wretched. To say the most its honest but lacking in both the wonder that is love and the writing that is poetry. I hope this impressed your "lover" because thats the only person you should have shared this set of words with. This type of peom is whats known as a Pimple. I should know I've written alot of them before they even had it as a poem type. Read more verse. Good Verse. Then try writing. Exsamples here being -=Dark_Angel=- to show you shear verbal skill and intelligence, Godswife and Horus8(In his many different usernames) for depth, humor, and emotion. -2- Just because its honest, horrid, but honest.