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lullaby (Free verse) by the indign as the dawn begins to fade
brightening up the dusk
the stars begin to sing their tunes
music for the angels' choir
the songs gently fall to earth
like feathers onto pillows
into your sleeping ears
across your angel smile
bringing soft joy and calm
into your resting mind
soothing your busy soul
caressing your loving heart
the angels sing for you
the stars sing to you
bringing together precious harmony
basking you in their love
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Posted: April 1, 2004 12:08 PM PST; Last modified: April 1, 2004 12:08 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.5 Overall Rank: 2715 Comments:
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deleted user @ 68.169.177.107
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1-Apr-04/12:31 PM
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A bit too pleasantly cutesie.
too "listy" - yes, I made that word up.
Gimme so flow, gimme some "poetry".
...until you get raped in the middle of the night
"as the dawn begins to fade
brightening up the dusk" How??
Give me a poem less rubbish,
And i will it furnish, A mark of more than two, For at the moment it has made me revrse-void my lunch all over my seat.
This isnt my style, but it isnt bad...like the descriptions
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