Free verse № 136590
Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break
When will the images come
And where will come from
A damp day confounds the seasons
Feeling more like mellow autumn
Than iron January
False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps
or to retain warmth
warmth + water bring life,
or at least sustain it.
River bend
Rough water
Smooth water
Gravel island
I work (and so therefore also write)
In a bourgeois town
Where it is not uncommon to
See such vulgar people as footballers.
Or so my colleague say;
I canât recognise the overpaid fuckers.
ICO pen inscribes my downfall.
Break into prose. Why have I not done this before?
9/1/06 by the river
Scrub that comment about autumn
Behind the mellowness
There is a keen cold
that thins the blood
That leads to:
Sluggishness
or snap to alert?
Depending on mood.
Because this is internal.
Sorry if that was fallacious
and I was pathetic.
16 comments
i question the need for the stanza on footballers. i'm missing the relationship to the seasonality of the rest of it.
then again, maybe the january fog has got to me as well.
False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps
or to retain warmth
sorry for being so traditionalist, but the "+" and the date were eyesores
it was good in spite of all that.
A damp day confounds the season(s)
Or so my colleague(s) say; Or so my colleague says;
The whole See such vulgar people as footballers./ Or so my colleague say;/I canât recognise the overpaid fuckers. I quite cack handed.
Sorry if that was fallacious/and I was pathetic. is a play on pathetic fallacy but why is fallacious the correct word for this poem.
I scribbled this down in my lunch break in about ten minutes, deliberately without thinking about what I'm saying. So I've reproduced it without changing anything, keeping all the mistakes. As I say, I haven't written any poetry for a long time, and this seemed like a way of starting again.
Oh, and I've actually misspelled 'lunch' in the title. Although actually I ate my lunch earlier at my desk while pretending to work.
I like "iron January" (usually it is anyway)--the rest is very drafty (as in first pass) and with some tweaking will probably reveal it's form. Neither fallacious nor pathetic.
TAFKAHattersHare
ICO pen?
I'm missing a bit, but I like the self-abuse. :)
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