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Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones

When will the images come And where will come from A damp day confounds the seasons Feeling more like mellow autumn Than iron January False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps or to retain warmth warmth + water bring life, or at least sustain it. River bend Rough water Smooth water Gravel island I work (and so therefore also write) In a bourgeois town Where it is not uncommon to See such vulgar people as footballers. Or so my colleague say; I can’t recognise the overpaid fuckers. ICO pen inscribes my downfall. Break into prose. Why have I not done this before? 9/1/06 by the river Scrub that comment about autumn Behind the mellowness There is a keen cold that thins the blood That leads to: Sluggishness or snap to alert? Depending on mood. Because this is internal. Sorry if that was fallacious and I was pathetic.

<~> 9-Jan-06/10:44 AM
no need for apologiy.

i question the need for the stanza on footballers. i'm missing the relationship to the seasonality of the rest of it.

then again, maybe the january fog has got to me as well.




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