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Cargo pants (Free verse) by tre
I was just a girl in cargo pants, a hang ten t-shirt, and a blue backpack. I walked into class. I walked in late. It was nighttime. Maybe that set the mood. You spotted me immediately. I stood out to you like a sororiy girl at a punk concert. Why do I remember the minute details of that day? How you told me that you called your mom and told her, "I met this beautiful girl from Atlanta." Or did you never tell her that at all? I ate up all your lines like candy. You fed them to me well. But, I never understood why you wanted me. Or so you said you did. We were opposites. I was the mis-matching fool with a scrunchie in her hair, You were the die-hard athlete with chlorine in YOUR hair. I was water, you were oil. We didn't mix. You weighed me down, seeped into me. Get the fuck off of me! Let me breathe. I'm not right for you. Because I'm just a girl in cargo pants, a hang ten t-shirt, and a blue backpack. And boys like you don't belong with girls like me.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.625
Weighted score: 5.7059712
Overall Rank: 1944
Posted: April 1, 2004 5:09 PM PST; Last modified: April 1, 2004 5:09 PM PST
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Comments:
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 1-Apr-04/6:12 PM | Reply
"sorority"

Sure, I get it.
[8] New Life Drug @ 67.112.121.237 | 1-Apr-04/6:41 PM | Reply
ah ha.
[8] deleted user @ 68.169.177.107 | 1-Apr-04/6:44 PM | Reply
A cute story, light and a bit humorous. That's probably an insult, but I'm more than a bit older.
[10] aliena @ 210.214.123.74 | 1-Apr-04/11:39 PM | Reply
loved it..
[n/a] tre @ 147.9.40.233 > aliena | 2-Apr-04/8:54 AM | Reply
thanks :) thats all i want to do..reach people with my life...look forward to reading some of yours
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 2-Apr-04/9:27 AM | Reply
Hi tre ^_^ I thought this was such a cool poeme! i hope you'll read some of mine n tell me what u think!!1
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 2-Apr-04/9:50 AM | Reply
you are a bad man.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 > Shuushin | 2-Apr-04/9:52 AM | Reply
what do yu mean?? i hope I havne't offended you because i'm truely sorry if so :(
[8] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 | 2-Apr-04/12:42 PM | Reply
This is a cute little story..
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