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love comes but once (Free verse) by francis nor capule love comes but once
that much is true
perhaps enough
for me and you
though flowers bloom
and come to pass
i pray and hope
that this would last
for its such a shame
for this to pass
without a trace
without a trace
Up the ladder:
Bilateral
Down the ladder:
stranger
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Posted: April 2, 2004 7:47 AM PST; Last modified: May 20, 2004 9:20 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.029801 Overall Rank: 7328 Comments:
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.213.67.10
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2-Apr-04/10:02 AM
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That is the sappiest thing I've ever read. To say the least its wretched. To say the most its honest but lacking in both the wonder that is love and the writing that is poetry. I hope this impressed your "lover" because thats the only person you should have shared this set of words with. This type of peom is whats known as a Pimple. I should know I've written alot of them before they even had it as a poem type. Read more verse. Good Verse. Then try writing. Exsamples here being -=Dark_Angel=- to show you shear verbal skill and intelligence, Godswife and Horus8(In his many different usernames) for depth, humor, and emotion. -2- Just because its honest, horrid, but honest.
cutesy ish...most definetly not my style, but ill give you a 4 bc i dont judge to harshly
hehe, you caught me in a good mood. I just left my boyfriend's house and i miss him :-P being sappy can be fun
Do you really know that love comes but once, or are you just saying that because it sounds poetic and preformulated? And how would you know that, anyway?
By my own count, love has come for me about seven times - unless you really mean *cum*, in which case, sadly, the correct figure is never.
love has never *cum* for you.
How sad, since you say you have a wife.
Don't get him started on his wife.
cock
Yep.
192-1 - now thats worth discussing at length.
What's 192-1?
England New Zealand - except we are now 198-1.
"1533: Oram returns after tea and makes Strauss play and miss but undoes his good work with a leg-side delivery that is clipped for four."
I have no idea what this means.
Oram is the name of a Kiwi (not a fruit but a New Zealandder) New Zealand is an island just south of Hawaii.
Strauss was a famous composer, and also and Englishman on his debut at Lords. Lords is a cricket ground. Tea is an afternoon meal which involves tiffin and a cup of cha. Strauss was made to attempt to strike the ball, and he missed, an indication that the ball had just missed the outside edge. Strauss undid orams good work and clipped - ie. delicately spanked, him on his leg side four four of the Queen's runs. I trust this has made the game easier to understand. We are now 208 for 1.
I hope you can understand some of my confusion. Most of this sport sounds utterly gay to me. To wit:
"1641: Oram gains a reward for some tight spell and is overjoyed as Trescothick prods for an edge behind. New batsman Butcher survives despite a silly waft first ball."
You don't want to understand it. Cricket is the sporting equivalent of straining too hard in an impromptu trumping competition with the lads, and then sitting still for a three-day-long chemistry exam with your mistake clinging to your inner thigh.
Don't listen to that dithering dolt -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I.he went to the very worst sort of school where cricket and rugby were surplanted by assoication football and hockey.
As a consequence -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. will never gain admittance to the higher echelons of London Society and the very best Gentlemen's clubs. Instead he will have to resign himself to the musty old farts in the National Liberal Club whom he can entertain with tales from his day working as an I.T. contractor for a large multi national corporation. I will toast his good health from Whites whilst enjoying a game of whist and a fine port and discussing with my fellow members the rental yield of our estates.
I'll have you know I played county cricket for Buckinghamshire. And I daresay I've seen things happen on the cricket pitch that would make you weep tears of horror. Like the time my hopelessly earnest younger brother galloped in to bat with only a pair of boxers beneath his whites to hold his box in position. The armour lasted about two overs, then on the third the holy shield slid down his trouser leg and fell onto his shoe. What courage it took to face out the rest of the over, boxless and trembling, praying with all his might that the other boys hadn't noticed.
I always thought the slang term "box" was only used to describe female genitals. It does in the U.S., anyway.
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